【翻译写作】练习之二原文+总结，请大家踊跃讨论

逃学的孩子们都缺乏想像力。他们通常能够做到的，至多也就是安静地钓上一天鱼，或在电影院里坐上8个小时，一遍遍地看同一部电影。而有那么一个小男孩，他 在逃学期间旅行了1,600英里，从而使上述所有逃学的孩子们都相形见绌了。他搭便车到了多佛，天快黑时钻进了一条船，想找个地方睡觉。第二天早上他醒来 时，发现船在这段时间已经到了加来。当男孩从船里爬出来时，谁也没有发现他。从那里他又搭上卡车到了巴黎。司机给了他几块饼干和一杯咖啡，就把他丢在了城 外。男孩截住的下一辆车，没有像他希望的那样把他带到巴黎市中心，而是把他带到了法国和西班牙边界上的佩皮尼昂。他在那儿被一个警察抓住了，之后被当局送 回了英国。他无疑为成千上万梦想逃避上学的孩子们创造了一项纪录。

Original: The record-holder

Children who play truant from school are unimaginative. A quiet day's fishing, or eight hours in a cinema seeing the same film over and over again, is usually as far as they get. They have all been put to shame by a boy who, while playing truant, travelled 1,600 miles. He hitchhiked to Dover and, towards evening, went into a boat to find somewhere to sleep. When he woke up next morning, he discovered that the boat had, in the meantime, travelled to Calais. No one noticed the boy as he crept off. From there, he hitchhiked to Paris in a lorry. The driver gave him a few biscuits and a cup of coffee and left him just outside the city. The next car the boy stopped did not take him into the centre of Paris as he hoped it would, but to Perpignan on the French-Spanish border. There he was picked up by a policeman and sent back to England by the local authorities. He has surely set up a record for the thousands of children who dream of evading school.

Some random comments from 学委:

 Different ways of saying逃学：play truant, play hooky, skip school, cut class

使…相形见绌: my personal favorite: newton’s “outshine”

饼干：As it is more like breakfast and with coffee, it is more likely to be “biscuits” than “crackers”.

Difference between AE and BE: besides the play truant vs. play hooky difference, there is the use of “lorry” in BE for “truck”.

For the second 搭车，I used “hitchhike” at first, then thought the original must have used different words for the two “搭车”, so I changed the second one to a plain “got to the truck”. I was a little surprised to see the original did use “hitchhike” twice. Lesson learned: don’t over think it.

标的红字的是我觉得用法有问题的，绿的是我觉得要insert或者替代你的红的翻译的，黄色highlight的是我觉得有待商榷的。

非文学青年：

All children that skip school lack imagination(are not that imaginative?). What they usually could do, at the best, is to spend a quiet day fishing, or to sit in the cinema watching the same movie over and over for eight hours. However, there was this boy, who traveled 1，600 miles during his truant（？truancy）, outsmarting all the above children. He hitchhiked to Dover and crawled into a boat at dusk to find a place to sleep. He woke up the next morning only to find that the boat had gotten to Calai. No one noticed him when he crawled out of the boat. From there, he got on a truck and went to Paris. The truck driver gave him a few biscuits and a cup of coffee and left him outside of the city. The next car the boy stopped did not take him to downtown Paris as he wanted, but to Perpignan, the border of France and Spain. He was caught there by a policeman and sent back to the Britain. He undoubtedly set a record for thousands of children who dream of skipping school.

愚公：

Children escaping from school lack imagination.  What they can do at most is fishing quietly for a day or sitting in a movie theater for eight hours, watching the same film again and again.  However, there is one boy who travelled 1,600 miles while he was escaping the school. That made other kids who escape from school look dumb(too strong, J).  He took a ride to Dover, then boarded on a ship to find a place to sleep.  He found out, when he woke up the next morning, that the ship had arrived at Calai.  No body spotted him when he got off the ship.  From there, he ws given a lift by a truck driver going to Paris.  The driver gave him some crackers and a cup of coffee, then dropped him off outside of the city.  The boy stopped another car.  But he was taken to Perpignan, the border of Spain and France, instead of of the center of Paris that he was hoping for.  He was caught by a poilce officer there and was sent back by authority to Britain.  Without a doubt, he has created a record for thousands of kids who dream of escaping school.

学英语3151

Most kids who play hooky don’t have much imagination. What they do at most were fishing whole day or sitting in a movie theater for 8 hours watching the same movie over and over again. However, there was this young boy who had traveled 1600 miles during those days which had made the other kids who skipped school seemingly mediocre. He took a bus to get to 多佛. When the night fell, he sneaked into a boat to sleep and found himself in 加来 the second day. No one saw him when he got out of the boat. From加来, he took a truck to get to Paris. The driver gave him a couple of coffee and several pieces of cookies and left him at the edge of the town. He then hitched another ride which did not take him to the center of Paris as he had expected, in stead it took him to Perpignan at the border of France and Spain. At there he was caught by police and was sent back to England. Undoubtedly he set a record for hundreds and thousands of kids who play hooky.

美风：

Children who cut classes were lack of imagination. What they usually did, at most, going fishing quietly for a whole day, or staying in a theater for 8 hours to see the same film again and again. However, there was a boy who traveled for 1600 miles during his cutting classes, therefore, he made all of the children above not smart. He reached Dover by a ride, then he enterred a boat for sleeping when the evening was coming. When he woke up in the next day morning, he found the boat arrived to (at) Calais. When the boy got out of the boat, nobody found him. Then he reached to Paris by a truck. The driver gave him several pieces of biscuit and a cup of coffee, and dropped him to the outside of the town. The next truck which was stopped by the boy, did not take him to the downtown of Paris as he hoped, but brought him to Perpignan, the boundary of France and Spain. He was caught by a cop over there, then he was sent back to England by the Bureau. Undoubtedly, he broke a record for thousands of children who dreamed of cuttng classes.

newton123

Children that play truant lack imagination. What they are often able to do is to go fishing quietly for one day, or stay in (the?) movie theatre for eight hours watching the same film again and again. Well, there is a little boy traveling over sixteen hundred of miles during the period of playing truant, greatly outshining the others. He was picked up at Dover and came on board of a ship after dark. The next morning when he woke up, he found out the ship arrived at Calais. No body detected him until he slipped out of the ship.(与原文意思有悖)  From there he caught upon a truck to Paris. The driver passed him biscuits and a cup of coffee and left him outside of the city. He then was on another vehicle, but he was not sent to the center of Paris as he expected, instead, he was brought to Perpignan at the border of France and Spain, where he was caught by a policeman and sent back to England. He no doubt created a record for hundreds and thousands students who play truant

小千：

Those children who like playing hooky from school (skipping school) all lack imagination. The most they can do is just quietly fishing for a day, or sitting in the cinema watching the same movie again and again for straight eight hours straight. However, there was a boy who traveled 1,600 miles during his skipping (while skipping from school). Compared with him, all the others will be thrown into the shade (all the others are nothing.) He had a free ride to Dover (He hitchhiked to Dover), and wormed into a ship looking for a place to sleep before sunset. When he woke up the next morning, he found the ship had already arrived at Calais. He crawled out of the ship, no one noticed him.(two sentences) From Calais he was picked up (lifted) by a truck to Paris. At the outside of the city, the driver gave him some cookie, a cup of coffee, and left him. The next car he hitchhiked didn’t drive him to the downtown Paris as he hoped, but dropped him at Perpignan which is located at the border of France and Spain. There he was stopped by a policeman, and then sent back to Britain. No doubt, he made a record for thousands of children who dream of playing hooky.

Bingli： 

The kids who play hooky are all unimaginative. Normally, All  they can do is to go fishing somewhere quietly for a whole day, or just watch the same movie again and again for 8 hours in the theatre. There was one boy who traveled 1600 miles when playing hooky, thus It made the others like nothing. He hitchhiked all the way to Dover,He wanted to get some sleep, and then he got into a boat when it was getting dark. When he woke up in( the) next morning, He found that the boat has arrived at Calais. No one noticed the boy when he got out of the boat. He then hitchhiked to Paris on a truck,The truck driver gave him a few cracker(s) and a cup of coffee and left him outside the town.The next driver who stopped by the kid didn’t take him to the downtown of Paris as what the kid expected,He turned out to take the boy to Perpignan where the border between France and Spain.He got caught there by a crop(haha, J) and was sent back to the U.K. by the authorities. He definitely set a record for millions of kids who want playing hooky.