3rd line
falsetruth
2010-11-26 10:43:00
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At first I was writing:
untold is a beautiful story
which unfolds only in memory
then I thought it was a little too complicated. I changed to
untold a beautiful story
unfolds only in memory
I was thinking like this at the time:
a beautiful story untold
now I think it makes more sense if we add a comma:
untold, a beautiful story
unfolds only in memory
戏雨飞鹰
2010-11-26 11:07:20oh, i see. thanks.