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falsetruth 2010-11-26 10:43:00 ( reads)

At first I was writing:
untold is a beautiful story
which unfolds only in memory

then I thought it was a little too complicated. I changed to
untold a beautiful story
unfolds only in memory

I was thinking like this at the time:
a beautiful story untold

now I think it makes more sense if we add a comma:
untold, a beautiful story
unfolds only in memory

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戏雨飞鹰

2010-11-26 11:07:20

oh, i see. thanks.

falsetruth

2010-11-26 11:50:33

would be 'an untold':)

戏雨飞鹰

2010-11-26 12:02:45

haha, 对。不能怪我,我初中没毕业。