天方叶：English Love Song， Let Summer Freeze

Willow dancin' in the summer wind
Leaves whisper you cann't hear
As we stop by

Sweet kiss on a summer's day
Heart beats all go away
You and me high

Stars trace our dreams' way
summer night end our day
You and me fly

天方叶
June 12，2011


附：原诗（摘自林贝卡）
Song: A Summer Song
Artist: Chad & Jeremy

Trees swayin' in the summer breeze
Showin' off their silver leaves
As we walked by

Soft kisses on a summer's day
Laughing all our cares away
Just you and I

Sweet sleepy warmth of summer nights
Gazing at the distant lights
In the starry sky

[tianfangye]

谢谢tern2
1.中英双全不敢说，只是想尝试一下。
2.接受你的建议把逗点儿去掉了。

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中英双全天方君：））

每行后面的comma去掉可能更好一点？也可以把有的逗号换成小点。这样或许语句上更顺些。

你唱的歌了不得，好唱啊！

[tern2]

中英双全天方君：））

每行后面的comma去掉可能更好一点？也可以把有的逗号换成小点。这样或许语句上更顺些。

你唱的歌了不得，好唱啊！

[林贝卡]

天方叶，

谢谢你听了Chad & Jeremy演唱的《A Summer Song》后即兴赋诗，我把你的《Let Summer Freeze》做成帖子了，略表谢意，连接如下：

Let Summer Freeze Author: tianfangye
http://blog.wenxuecity.com/blogview.php?date=201106&postID=10345

Have a nice week ahead,

Rebecca