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英诗汉译 I Think I Should Have Loved You Presently by Edna St. Vince

马下人 2015-03-02 11:03:18 ( reads)

对我, 这是一首比较难翻译的诗。 我不敢说我翻译得对。  欢迎讨论。


I Think I Should Have Loved You Presently

by Edna St. Vincent Millay

 


I think I should have loved you presently,

And given in earnest words I flung in jest;

And lifted honest eyes for you to see,

And caught your hand against my cheek and breast;

And all my pretty follies flung aside

That won you to me, and beneath your gaze,

Naked of reticence and shorn of pride,

Spread like a chart my little wicked ways.

I, that had been to you, had you remained,

But one more waking from a recurrent dream,

Cherish no less the certain stakes I gained,

And walk your memory’s halls, austere, supreme,

A ghost in marble of a girl you knew

Who would have loved you in a day or two.

我想我没准儿很快爱上你by Edna St. Vincent Millay

翻译: 高兴

 

我想我没准儿很快爱上你,

对你诚恳地讲话而不是躲闪回避;

并且抬起诚实的双眼给你看,

让你用手在我的脸颊和胸前游弋;

并且把所有的娇柔矫揉造作一并收起

即使它们曾为我赢得了你, 并任你上下凝睇

去掉保留,撇掉自尊,

平摊开来, 让我娇嗔的样子一览无余。

如果我早就这样做, 我们不会分离,

但我再次被从类似的梦中唤起,

过去那些教训绝对不能忘记,

这样, 我从你记忆的殿堂走出, 冷静, 高傲地,

如大理石雕像的幽灵, 那个你似乎了解的女孩,

她没准儿一两天后会爱上你。


 这是一首讲爱情的诗。  即使在英语世界, 人们在分析作者的本意时, 也有两种猜测。 一种是男人抛弃女人, 另一种是女人抛弃男人。  后一种见解是少数, 我只见过一篇文章。见: http://www.pipsqueakery.net/poetry-thursday-edna-st-vincent-millay-and-the-sassy-love-sonnet/  但我的分析与此文章相近, 因此按这一思路作的翻译。 我把这一翻译放在这里以期引起讨论。




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南山松

2015-03-02 17:51:03

谢谢高兴分享好诗好译.新周快乐!

聚曦亭

2015-03-03 06:08:58

主人翁应该是女的。原文用完成时的虚拟语态,

马下人

2015-03-03 06:19:18

谢谢

马下人

2015-03-03 08:30:50

挥之不去的疑问--我想我们应该认真讨论一下

马下人

2015-03-03 08:47:51

History of Sonnet Rhymes

马下人

2015-03-03 08:58:43

Is Chinese language RHYME Poor?

马下人

2015-03-03 09:01:05

Is there a theory that says we need to keep the rhyme scheme?

马下人

2015-03-03 09:13:21

will read

聚曦亭

2015-03-03 11:08:40

忙到现在才有点空,这几行能说明她是女性

马下人

2015-03-03 14:32:30

See if you can discuss my translation in detail